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Chronicler + Poetry = ?
Topic Started: Apr 23 2012, 01:30 PM (776 Views)
Chronicler
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I don't write too much poetry, but this one I wrote for my English class for extra credit a few weeks ago. Riley liked it in any case (but probably more-so because it was dedicated to her haha).


From One Road to the Next

The winding path of leaves and dirt,
A place that I’ve been known to go;
Like a weightless feather or a wind-blown shirt,
My legs are guided to the flow.

A place that I’ve spent most of my life,
Not once daring to step out of line;
I follow along with constant strife,
Until that coarse road then becomes fine.

A part of the path I had never knew,
Its smooth solid surface stretches straight out;
The step onto this side feels so true,
Here I can’t fall, without a doubt.

Calm cold concrete becomes warm under the sun,
And my body adjusts to be in tune;
Unlike the dark woods where I’ve been know to run.
This place feels like home, and it happened so soon.

Not once did I dare to even look back,
As a hatchling who has finally left its nest;
Along the new path I set out with my pack,
I’m where I’m meant to be, and now I may rest.
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(things I meant to do much sooner than this, #23: reply to Chron's poem topic whoops)

Ah, the English assignment that you turn out to be pretty proud of in its own right. I know it well. Heck, I probably write better short stories for assignments than just for fun, heh.

This is pretty nice! (And sweet of you to dedicate it to your girlfriend, aw.) I'm afraid I don't really know all that much about poetry myself, but that was some neat imagery there, imo.

Also, you've got a little typo in the second-to-last stanza there: "know" in the second-to-last line should probably be "known". :p

I know you said you don't write much poetry, but maybe you should try more? Why not? Hey, if Riley likes it... ;)
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I have returned! :O

I agree with Phoenixsong, this is really good! I can't write poetry for the life of me, haha.
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Thanks guys!! I don't write anything on my own time usually, but I think I might since my girlfriend really liked it and I'm apparently good at it haha.

I'm going to try and get a lot more into music with my guitar this Summer, however, so perhaps I'll aim towards crafting some words into songs instead of a poem. =)
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